Afternoon Footy

As part of a project with uni me and my classmates were asked to record and then write out in screenplay format a interaction between a group of people in order to get a feel for the rhythms and systems of people conversing. The main thing to try and get from it was how it sounded because with screenwriting you want your dialogue to sound natural but to in fact always be giving information, something that doesn’t actually happen in real conversation. I decided to use my one for todays a-scene-a-day in order to give myself a day off. It which features myself, my brother, and my parents

To Mum and Dad, yes I recorded you and have now put your words on the internet…ummm…hope that’s cool. To Jonathan, now everyone will know your incomplete knowledge of football, but that wasn’t much of a secret anyway.

Enjoy

INT. LOUNGE ROOM – DAY

Twenty seven year old twin brothers Jonathan and Damian sit on a couch in their parents small but modern Richmond apartment. To the side on separate lounge chairs sit the owners of the apartment, their Mum, Sue, and Dad, Peter, both in their fifty’s. On the television is a football match. All sit and talk as they watch.

SUE
That’s pretty pleasing to see the scores are level at half time.

JONATHAN
Yeah.

SUE
Because they didn’t look-

PETER
Oh, it’s a good game.

JONATHAN
Considering they were, what, six points, err, if that?

Jonathan thinks for a moment

JONATHAN (CONT’D)
Cameron…Cameron Long, is that his name?

DAMIAN
Ling

SUE
Ling. Cameron Ling.

JONATHAN
Oh, Ling. I was close. Pretty good though, right?

SUE
Yeah.

DAMIAN
(mockingly)
Doing pretty good, mate!

JONATHAN
Thanks, Damo!

DAMIAN
One letter away!

PETER
What did you say?

JONATHAN
(together with DAMIAN)
Cameron Long.

PETER
(laughing)
You idiot.

JONATHAN
(laughing)
It was pretty good! I thought that was good.

PETER
(mockingly)
I’m sure it was Cameron Lang.

SUE
Now it’s got nothing to do with his red hair, Peter, but I’ll tell you that is one unattractive man.

JONATHAN
Yes.

PETER
What!

JONATHAN
He is! Of course he is.

DAMIAN
Look at that face.

PETER
I don’t think he is.

JONATHAN
It’s his eyes and it’s his mouth.

PETER
I think he’s, a bloody, spunky looking ranga.

JONATHAN
He’s got big hollows around black eyes and then, just crooked teeth around a sloppy shaped mouth.

PETER
He’s a nice fella.

DAMIAN
(jokingly)
Bloody hell! Give Cameron Long a go, Jono!

All start laughing.

JONATHAN
(continuing the joke)
Hey I, I love Longey as much as the next guy.

Laughter continues for a beat.

PETER
(referring to television)
What’s he doing there?

JONATHAN
He’s hitting his own team mate.

PETER
He’s hitting his own team mate!

SUE
He’s fired up. So, Jon, do you watch much football, you and Frankie?

PETER
(at TV)
Ohhhhh! He is good that little guy. He is really good.

DAMIAN
Do you know his name, Mum?

SUE
Nup. He’s number nineteen.

PETER
Oh I do but I can’t think of it.

SUE
It’s not Touby?

PETER
He’s only a little bastard.

JONATHAN
Is it Daniel…

DAMIAN
Jono…just stop.

PETER
(suprised, to Jonathan)
Do you know it?

JONATHAN
No I don’t know it.

PETER
Awwwww.

JONATHAN
I think, I think I did well to get Cameron Long, it may have been technically incorrect but it was pretty bloody close!

SUE
Yeah I’m, I’m impressed.

PETER
What was that?

JONATHAN
I thought I did well to get Cameron Long but Damo’s giving me a hard time.

DAMIAN
You did really good, mate, you did really good.

SUE
Look at that Nick Maxwells had thirty five touches.

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